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September HMD

1) Comment to this post with a list of your characters! This meme, by the way, is voluntary but recommended.

2) Give and receive constructive criticism! We'll be watching and we will intervene if flames are being thrown about. Additionally, this is for commenting on the characters, and not the people playing them.

3) This meme is more for concrit than compliments--there will be a compliments meme for straight-out love, don't worry.

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Terezi Pyrope [ou] | Homestuck |

foretolds

I cant help but feel like theres something just not quite right with your Terezi? Just certain things she says or does just doesn't seem like Terezi to me. I'm sorry it isn't incredibly too much help, but I'd suggest trying to canon review to look over your voice for her.
I guess one example I could dig up was this (http://animus-network.livejournal.com/13747.html?thread=1016499#t1016499). First of all, I am pretty sure no where in canon has it ever been said Tavros' blood is 'orange'-- it is most definitely brown. But most importantly, I really can't see Terezi making that comment she made towards the bottom there, about the subject of the comic. It's exactly the kind of morbid humor that Terezi herself seems to enjoy-- I mean really, she holds fake trials and hangs dolls outside her windows to simulate hangings. She even treated Tavros' death in canon like a game, and didn't really have any sort of sadness or problem with it besides 'OH NO GOTTA GET VRISKA FOR HER CRIMES'.
So yeah! Just food for thought. I'm sure you have the potential to be a lovely Terezi :)

Thanks so much! I will definitely keep this in mind, though one thing I have to disagree with is the whole "she wasn't really sad about it" part. She was sad about it. Tavros was her friend and the panel where she finds him actually says that she would have cried if she had any tears left - she'd just finished sobbing over Dave. Also, the liner notes for her theme say that she cares about her friends deeply and gets pretty protective/sad over them, probably second only to Karkat.

But the morbid humor is something I need to work on, and I will definitely do that. <3

Other than that, is there something else "off"? I wish you could be more specific!

ETA: re the orange thing: I tend to go off of this (http://mspaintadventures.wikia.com/wiki/Trolls#Blood_and_Caste) chart for color names, which isn't an excuse I was just... Trying to explain my reasoning haha.

Edited 2011-09-04 23:42 (UTC)

oh yes, i completely forgot about dave! so yes, you win that round ;)

if it comes up again, i'll point it out to you! but i really cant put my finger on it right now. (hopefully i wont even need to!)

by the way, the anon on your HMD isn't working! else I would have posted there rather than here.

Ooooh thanks for telling me! And I really hope you can pinpoint it. Someone said maybe I was being a bit too... Warm with her? Is that it?

OU Aradia Megido [[Bad username or site: @ livejournal.com]] || Homestuck

Edited 2011-09-04 20:42 (UTC)

[AU2] Canada (

pineandmaple) Axis Powers Hetalia: Nyotalia
[OU] Fluttershy (

goingtoloveme) My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic
[AU6] Disciple (

discipleo) Homestuck

Edited 2011-09-04 20:45 (UTC)

I will be brave. I will deliver crit. I will... run away sob.

/what I did a few minutes ago ; ;

Seriously though. I know that Canada is an AU, but sometimes her personality doesn't quite match up with her app and her canon self. Not always, but sometimes. It seems as if she could be a little... gentler in her actions when she meets new people? You say she's very quiet and ladylike and rarely gets riled up, but it seems like sometimes you're playing her closer to how you use, say, the Disciple (who I am judging by more than the terrorthread she has with Mao, promise /shot). She shows stronger emotions easier, and speaks her mind a lot more than I would expect a Canada to do.

This is really just a suggestion, since she is an AU and kind of your creation and all. But it's just a thought that keeps popping up in my head and I figure I should let it out now. /passive aggressive sob

No you're right I feel. And I sort of go 'aaaa' at myself a lot because there's moments where I don't put as much thought into 'should she or would she do this or say this'. And then I go back and go 'oh yes she probably shouldn't have been so direct or something'.

It's something I can't really get away with even saying as an AU. I would say that Nyotalia is described as its own universe with girls who act different in ways from their counterparts in Hetalia. Canako was never meant to be as quiet as Canada but she is definitely too loud or direct at times and I will definitely work on it!

Disciple needs more sassy icons (http://asksassydisciple.tumblr.com/).

Tavros Nitram [OU] | Homestuck |

pchaaair

Edited 2011-09-04 20:44 (UTC)

OU!Germany [

cantgetlaidin] | Axis Powers Hetalia.

Ienzo [ou] -- Kingdom Hearts

And even though he's totally new, just in case:

Mao [ou] -- Disgaea 3

GO ME.

AU Feferi Peixes // this acct

OU Rose Lalonde //

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Molly Hayes | Runaways |

princesspowaful
*Note* In this setting I definitely play up Molly's innocence and lack of intelligence/smarts and such. The reason for that is because she knows that when she acts like that it makes people smile and in this tower they need to stay positive! Let me know if I'm going too far with it.

Kanaya Maryam | Homestuck |

grimauxilatrix
*Note* I'm mostly worried about her language and vocabulary and such @@

Hidari Shoutarou [OU] | Kamen Rider W |

thisclinchesit

Hino Eiji [OU] | Kamen Rider OOO |

hoboherooo

Fawkes [OU] | Fallout 3 |

lucidmutant

_{Come at me, bro. I'm ready.}

Lloyd Asplund [OU] ++ Canadian Geese ++

knightmaking

Tell me to be move active and stop sucking. go go go.

Poland | Axis Powers Hetalia |

polishrule

Equius Zahhak | Hommestack (ou) | this journal

anything besides "be more active" would be lovely, I know I really need to step up or step out

Tim Drake | DC Comics |

chapsandcowl
Haven't had much time to do stuff with him due to hiatuses BUT JUST IN CASE. He's still a new muse so I'd like input. /)__(\

David Lalonde [AU1] | crying alien children: the webcomic |

zampanofan413

trying to work on my activity, but anything else would be great

Edited 2011-09-04 21:03 (UTC)

Vriska Serket [OU] | Homestuck |

craaaaaaaazy8s

Meredy [OU] | Tales of Eternia |

hweeeeeel

I know I need to work on my activity because it's been spotty at best.

North Italy [au2] | Axis Powers Hetalia: Nyotalia |

airof

Italy Romano [OU] | Hetalia |

rompicoglioni
Karkat Vantas [OU] | Homestuck |

cancerousnubs
Dean Winchester [OU] | Supernatural |

gimmepie

✧Activity is an issue I am aware of and am working on.
✧~~I am also aware I need to actually intro Dean first hoho.~~

I AM TOTALLY UNFAMILIAR WITH ITALY'S CANON.

There isn't much I can say about your Karkat just because I... Haven't been able to play with him much. But what I have seen seems pretty spot on! One thing I've noticed is that you seem to have a tendency to drop threads. :(

Annnd Dean hasn't introed yet this comment is kind of lame I'm sorry :

Yeah, the threaddropping is another thing. X(

I will try to fix that though as with the activity! You are welcomed to bop me over the head if you see me even appear to be dropping threads! :<

Thank you for the crit! ;u; your comment was not lame at all shoosh

and [ AU ] || Homestuck

Edited 2011-09-04 21:14 (UTC)

Naminé [OU] |

lethechained | Kingdom Hearts

Sollux [OU] |

thekidsare0kay
Signless [AU] |

benigncancer

John Harley [AU] | Homestuck/RDV-V |

dreamsofderp

I have been atrocious with activity since the day I got here, but anything beyond that would be lovely!

[OU]

evertosoar - Axis Powers Hetalia
[AU]

letunityblossom - Axis Powers Hetalia

I know I should be more active, particularly with Lithuania. I tend to get caught up in mod stuff, ahaha.

OU davesprite (

cocksprite) | homestuck

don't look at my activity oh my god i just started a new job and i've been having trouble keeping up while getting used to working again

Edward Elric [OU] | Fullmetal Alchemist |

unexculpable

Edited 2011-09-05 00:22 (UTC)

Eridan Ampora [OU] | Homestuck |

allthefeelings

Jade Harley [AU2] | Homestuck |

gardenvagary
I know she's fairly different from HS!canon, so if anyone wants any explanations or anything, let me know.

No one saw that fail.

Edited 2011-09-05 03:53 (UTC)

Spain [AU2] | Hetalia |

latomatetas
Castiel [OU] | Supernatural |

thursdaywings

Minato Arisato [AU1] | Persona 3 (Portable) |

fractus_animus
Note: Man, it can be hard to separate him from his canon self at times, and then at other times it's glaring obvious, but yeah. It's really been a balancing act and I'll try to take anything anyone has to say if they bear his AU in mind into account!

Ventus [OU] | Kingdom Hearts: Birth By Sleep |

f0rceless
Ankh [OU] | Kamen Rider OOO |

handpuppeeet

Alright let's do it. Do it to it.

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